Sunday 11 August 2013

Eden Park by Harrison

WALT:  write sentences for effect

REMEMBER TO:
  • write simple sentences that have one idea
  • write compound sentences with two ideas using a joining word like 'and', 'to' or  'but'

In the holidays I went to Eden Park with my dad and friends to see the Chiefs versus the Blues. The Chiefs won 25 - 16.  It was sort of good because when they scored it was under big rucks.  We had hot dogs for dinner.  They were hot.  They were yummy.

1 comment:

  1. I enjoyed reading your story, Harrison. It sounds like you had a great time with your family at the rugby.
    I like the way you used because, (a joining word), to elaborate why the game was good.
    Keep up the good writing.

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