Maui and the Sun

In Room 9 we are learning to use interesting and technical vocabulary so that the reader can paint a picture in their mind. 

We need to use:

• adjectives
• specific detail
• technical languages
• interesting words instead of 'said'
• use punctuation like exclamation marks that helps to make our writing interesting

Here are some examples of our writing.

Maui and the sun

Maui the brave warrior was trying to eat his dinner in his little hut, but the sun went down.  Maui called his brothers to his little hut.  We have no time to eat and fish and hunt.  We need to slow the sun down.  So they wove flax ropes and caught the sun.  Now the sun goes slower so Maui and his brothers can eat and fish and have more time to hunt.

Ryder

Writing a Procedure

These are all the materials we needed to  make a spinner.

We had photographs of all the stages needed to make a spinner.  We watched Ms Sholson make a spinner and then we wrote down the steps needed to make a spinner.

One of the most important things we learnt was to be very specific with our steps.  We could not write "it" because people would not know what "it" was.  We had to start each step with a verb, which would tell the reader what to do.

We then made a spinner, following the instructions we had written down.  It was very easy to see when we had not provided enough information, said exactly where to put things or been specific about the tools we needed to use.

At last though, most of us had success!  Look at our spinners spin!